Add the line

Not when you live forever. Great things get you noticed. Get you worshiped.

Maybe scrap that last sentence.

I rewrote my query letter for the tenth time yesterday. I've read so many different Good Query Letter blogposts that everything is starting to blur together. My pitch is solid, I think. BCC just like Karen Nelson suggests, but for some reason I remember someone saying not to mention themes, to let them see the themes in your writing, but then examples I see include themes. *shrug* I added a few thematic questions. That made me realize, perhaps I did not explore those themes as best I can.

I'll wait for feedback from folks and then take a look when I take my next pass.